I gave a presentation to increase awareness for E-Prime at my local Toastmasters club, which currently meets online. I stepped in as a speaker with short notice, so I didn’t have a lot of time to prepare and rehearse. I’m therefore not all that happy with it and appreciate any feedback to make this presentation better.
I really liked the video, especially during these times in which I muted and un-followed “friends” with the rather annoying tendency of linking Covid19 with 5G networks, chemtrails and other crazy conspiracies.
The only thing that, IMHO, could be improved, is the fact that it was not immediately clear from your speech what is “E-Prime”, meaning, if it’s a name you gave to this, or if it’s something that you learned/studied/read about. I guess an easy fix would be either to put a small link to the original document, or to spend 5 seconds saying something like “As Mr John Smith called it, the e-prime…”
But as usual, a great speech from you and I look forward to tomorrow’s meeting 🙂
Thanks for taking the time, Marco. Good point about E-Prime. While I did mention having learned about E-Prime from Robert Anton Wilson, going a bit deeper into the origin would likely help better understand this technique. Thanks again!
Hey Claudio, If your goal was to increase the awareness of E-Prime, which I believe is an incredibly powerful distinction in life, why do you need all of that other stuff before you mention the main point to the talk. It feels like two talks in one. If you came up with a more compelling hook or grabber in the opening rather than what you did, it will easily lead you to the main point of your talk. I would have liked hearing more examples of To-Be “to be” more clear about your insights. To me, replacing your opening and including more “use case” examples would elevate this talk to award-winning quality, IMHO.
Thank you for taking the time, Nathan. You’re right: I definitely need a stronger hook and get to the heart of it faster. I do want to convey that sometimes technology is ahead of our ability to use it, like the printing press, but I can do that faster than in this first version. Thanks again for your valuable feedback.