Michael Marchuk: Good start, still reading though. It sounds almost like an informercial. I’m not feeling YOU, although it’s very friendly.
Michael Marchuk: Asking for funding when talking to audience of tech pros is probably not appropriate. Consider the audience.
Michael Marchuk: Perhaps a “share” option to help collaborate with others in your network / team
Marco Vezzale: Maybe since you pick a random post, please either find or PUT a real one which could surprise or “wake up” the audience… since you already, as said, pick up a random post, pick a very interesting one, or one that the audience would like to go back to read after the presentation
Michael Marchuk: Also, a “random” post should be some more exclusive content that couldn’t be found with a quick Google search…
Marco Vezzale: Yes, exactly
Scottie Spurzem: Work on your call to action or “the ask” for each specific audience. For Tech resellers, partners and CIO’s/IT managers – what do you want themto do? Also make it easy for them to see the website address and how to reach you. ;-}
Marco Vezzale: Yes, the demo was NOT on the “real” domain, it was some documet360, my bad if it’s a well known 🙂